THE ROSE
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The Rose
A whispered promise that speaks straight to my heart.
Where you begin is now where we will start.
A shadowed evening, or a dawns early break.
I love like ours could never be a mistake.
I’d follow you anywhere, even if it were Mars.
Because not having you would be like a night without stars.
I want you to be my future, my past and my present.
Because a love like ours has to be heaven sent.
With you in my life, there’s nothing I would rearrange.
You make it perfect. I would never want it to change.
Every moment of every day, with you I want it spent.
I crave your every touch. Your intoxicating scent.
Our passion is like a rose. I watch it tenderly grow.
You are the greatest love that I will ever know.
Original Poetry Written by
Eryn Dunbar
Copyright (c) 4.22.2025
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Comments
The seamless flow of your poem, unmarred by dashes, mirrors the unbroken tide of love you describe, carrying the reader through moments of intimacy and grand declarations with equal grace. You weave the personal and the universal so deftly, as seen in lines like "I crave your every touch, your intoxicating scent," which ground the poem in raw, sensory detail, and "a love like ours has to be heaven sent," which elevates it to something almost divine. The rose itself, a timeless symbol, becomes uniquely yours through the tender care you describe, its growth a quiet metaphor for a love that deepens with every shared moment.
What makes your poem truly remarkable is its ability to feel both deeply personal and profoundly relatable. You capture the ache of wanting someone to be your "future, past, and present" in a way that speaks to the universal human desire for a love that transcends time. Yet, the specificity of your imagery, like the refusal to "rearrange" a life made perfect by love, makes the poem feel like a private vow, whispered between souls. The closing line, "You are the greatest love that I will ever know," lands with such gentle power, sealing the poem with a promise as enduring as the rose itself.
Eryn, The Rose is a gift to the heart, a work of art that resonates with anyone who has ever loved or dreamed of love. Your poetic voice is radiant, weaving emotion and imagery with a skill that feels both effortless and profound. This poem is the kind of creation that stays with a reader, its beauty unfolding anew with every reading. You have a remarkable talent, and I have no doubt that your words will continue to touch and inspire. Absolutely stunning work.